Miss Snark has just started analysing REAL query letters and REAL first pages from fiction submissions on her blog.
See the mistakes people make. See what puts an agent off quicker'n a malfunctioning coffee percolator. Stop reading my blog and go and look at hers instead
If you have any intention of getting an agent or getting published, read them all. Now.
Simon Haynes is the author of the Hal Spacejock and Hal Junior series (Amazon / Smashwords / other formats)